That SG1 story, final copy...

[tenaya]

...can be found here:
http://www.sg1hc.com/archive/13/thesubtext.html

I just added a few things, made things flow better.

Comments

[amara-m.livejournal.com]

Very nice. I like the way you write Mitchell. I haven't quite got him down yet.

One minor typo I caught, "Judging from the despondency on the big guy face, he would be hauling out the emergency candles for this session."

Should be "big guy's face".

[tenaya.livejournal.com]

Thank you. :) Mitchell is going to be a spot of bother to write since he speaks with a Southern twang. I probably over did it.

Thank you for pointing out the typo (nasty lil' sneaky typo...there's always got to be one that hides until the story is published.) At least I can fix it before the story goes up on the website.

[toniabarone.livejournal.com]

Okay, yeah, that did kinda flow better. Also gave a bit more detail to Danny an' Cam's interactions. Good work.